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Commission WIP by *fakethislife:iconfakethislife:

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First WIP for a commission I got.

It's for ~michaelmas of ~ArskaTheMan's Charractor Shiro Kamaitachi [link]

Crits would be good, please and thanks, just try to ignore the background lines cutting through the charrie.

Pose reffed from [link] by ~wookiestock

EDIT: Edited from comments in a crit

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=ceara Jun 21, 2009, 3:32:15 AM
Its looking pretty good so far :D The overall composition works pretty well. The biggest issue I can see is that the head seems a little small - especially given that it's in profile. I would think it should be quite a bit larger as it looks like it would be pretty narrow!
Other than that, the area where the tail is looks a little awkward, but that could just be that I haven't figured out what is there. I'm a bit easily confused that way especially with the background lines still in.
I really like the arm closest to the camera, it works pretty well. The overall composition of the piece also works pretty well. I would be tempted to make the canvas have more space at the top and to the left, to provide a bit more depth to the overall image.
But it's looking good! The expression and composition works pretty well too :D
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~NioTheDreamer Jun 21, 2009, 7:37:45 AM
I think a bit more contour to your line (variation)and a reduction in overlapping lines would really bring out the form of your drawing and reduce visual confusion and let the composition really shine

--
Let the strands of creation capture you,
see the splendor of that which is real,
but still be memorized by the possibility,
Let love, frustration, and sadness fill you,
and take you away on a journey
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*fakethislife Jun 21, 2009, 12:10:28 PM
The overlapping lines wont overlap when I've got the colour/shading done, the background will be behind the subject. I'm not sure what you mean by 'contour' though?

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I bought a cactus. A week later it died. And I got depressed, because I thought, Damn. I am less nurturing than a desert.
- Demetri Martin, New York Magazine, October 3, 2005
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~NioTheDreamer Jun 21, 2009, 7:29:27 PM
Lines that change in thickness, lines that taper and change in boldness, and thickness. Something an art professor harped on me about

--
Let the strands of creation capture you,
see the splendor of that which is real,
but still be memorized by the possibility,
Let love, frustration, and sadness fill you,
and take you away on a journey
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*fakethislife Jun 21, 2009, 9:57:06 PM
Now I get you. I'll give it a go, thanks

--
I bought a cactus. A week later it died. And I got depressed, because I thought, Damn. I am less nurturing than a desert.
- Demetri Martin, New York Magazine, October 3, 2005
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